How is the beginning of my story?

Hey, I think you should space out your paragraphs to make it more manageable to read. You could also break up the dialog at the beginning by giving background information in between. At the beginning you say my mother, my father, then my sister. Maybe you shouldn't reveal everyone's identities just yet, or maybe do so in the dialog so that you're showing rather than telling. It's very good, keep it up!